tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6682556516035409801.post8206543168354239148..comments2023-06-29T01:48:34.631-07:00Comments on Baby Research Projects: Negative Effects of Beuty Pageants On ChildrenRobert Griffithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09198487907085970109noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6682556516035409801.post-48080128990159592542012-04-23T10:38:10.005-07:002012-04-23T10:38:10.005-07:00this is a good topic to discuss for it is not as w...this is a good topic to discuss for it is not as well known as some other child-related issues but it is as severe as a lot of the other problems. the picture show the "older effect" of the make-up and how it could effect their self esteem. the formatting is good and most of the links work and go to good websites. there are some spelling errors for example the title but my overall view of this essay is that it is well written and addresses the important parts of this subject. it did not change my views on the subject for i already new about this problem and agree it is not good, but most do not talk about these issues coming from child beauty pageants and it is good someone addresses them. i give this project an A.Emilyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03485061051431500901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6682556516035409801.post-740981271714205372012-04-23T10:35:32.446-07:002012-04-23T10:35:32.446-07:00- Choice of Topic: Interesting, could be interesti...- Choice of Topic: Interesting, could be interesting to find out the statistical outcomes of these kids.<br /><br />- Well-Written (Original) Essay: This essay is decent writings, there are things that I would change but there are a few well structured sentences mixed in.<br /><br />- Appropriate / Relevant Pictures: I think that the pictures are relevant and appropriate.<br /><br />- Formatting (Text & Pictures): The formatting of the text seems okay however I would have put the pictures up in between text in order to help break it up more rather than posting the pictures at the bottom.<br /><br />- Working Links: All the links appear to be in working order however the squidoo.com one seems to be in a different format than the others.<br /><br />- Visually Appealing: I would have arranged the pictures differently in order to make the essay more appealing.<br /><br />- Good Labels (i.e. “baby, babies, SIDS, causes, facts, medical”): This essay doesnt seem to have any labels.<br /><br />- Recommendations for making the essay better (spelling, grammar, pictures, facts, etc.): There are some formatting issues, a few spots where spaces have been left out and a few typing errors (like in the title) I would also have changed the sentence structure in a lot of the sentences.<br /><br />- How did the essay change your views about the topic? I think I already had my opinions made about this subject but some of the information was logical.<br /><br />- Overall Grade (A-F): CMeganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13877049623153104828noreply@blogger.com